Last night, everyone had a harmonious exchange of writing opinions, and he was 'executed' along the way.
If they repeated this process, it would inevitably become a bit boring.
So he suggested, "Yesterday we extensively shared writing experiences, but it was a bit vague and didn't leave a more intuitive impression. How about this: we evaluate each other's works. Under professional scrutiny, everyone can draw more useful conclusions."
"I agree with Senpai!"
"This method sounds pretty good."
"Hmm... it's certainly more targeted."
The girls quickly agreed with his view.
This was indeed the case; readers' comments could always be noticed if they wanted to see them, but feedback from peers was rare.
"I think it's good too, so I'll start first!"
Yamada Elf volunteered and solemnly declared.
"But before that, we have to agree: no intentional flattery out of politeness. We must reach the most truthful conclusions! Only such advice is correct! And it's best to be subjective opinions, not objectively considered... just say what you think!"
It was all about being real!
'But, coming from Miss Elf's mouth... it always feels strange. Has she forgotten how the world views her?'
Izumi Chihiro mused inwardly, chuckling to himself.
This suggestion was naturally approved by all.
"Then, everyone, please evaluate my debut work! I can accept any harsh criticism; I, Yamada Elf, have a heart wider than the ocean!"
Yamada Elf displayed a broad-minded and magnanimous demeanor.
Everyone fell silent for a moment.
"Um, may I ask, what was Yamada-sensei's work again…?"
Suddenly, someone raised a hand and asked.
Yamada Elf's mouth was slightly agape, like a wind-dried salted fish, her fingers trembling, unable to speak.
The greatest humiliation is not being belittled, but being ignored!
"Cough cough, actually, this is quite normal. After all, even as light novel authors, it's impossible to have read everyone's works, especially when there are significant differences."
He coughed, smoothing things over.
Everyone understood this point, but Yamada Elf, who had been the first to jump out, still found it hard to accept.
Now she looked like a clown!
"I have read Elf's work, so let me give my sharp critique."
Izumi Chihiro continued.
Yamada Elf immediately shot him a grateful look.
She was saved again!
If no one had read it, that would have been truly pathetic!
"Elf's 'explosive flame dark elf's' main plot is…"
He first briefly recounted the plot to everyone, and then gave his actual evaluation, "Poor vocabulary, elementary school writing style, clichéd plot, using various reasons to make female characters completely nude, the plot structure is not mature enough, unable to be integrated…"
Yamada Elf immediately made a bitter face again.
But she also knew that such an evaluation was indeed very true. For example, the difficult problem of writing style, in the past she could argue 'it's just to make it easier for readers to understand,' but such an occasion did not allow her to do so. She needed to humbly accept it to allow the exchange conference to proceed normally.
"My suggestion is… you can copy more sentences to practice, and for plot construction, you can comprehensively analyze successful works for self-study. As for the complete nudity fetish, I think it's a bit too monotonous; you could consider other aspects like foot fetish, stockings, etc."
Izumi Chihiro believed he had given a fair assessment.
But as he spoke, the expressions of the others grew strange.
"Is Senpai a foot fetishist?"
Kani Nayuta's eyes sparkled as she asked this question in a friendly manner.
"It seems Scumbag-kun's gaze often lingers on my legs… The truth is revealed now."
Leaning against the back cushion of the sofa, Kasumigaoka Utaha propped her chin with one hand, lightly tracing her beautiful leg with a finger, a half-smile on her face.
"Is that how it is?"
Senju Muramasa's eyes narrowed, deep in thought.
"What are you talking about! I'm talking about serious matters! I'm just giving advice to Elf, don't mess around."
Izumi Chihiro replied righteously.
"I've received all your opinions! However, sacred complete nudity is not to be desecrated! As for what you mentioned, I might consider adding just a tiny bit…"
Yamada Elf, after receiving the evaluation, pondered for a moment and then responded.
"Pretentious."
He retorted.
"This isn't pretentious! This is faith!"
Yamada Elf loudly responded.
"In other words, you're not denying it?"
To the side, Kasumigaoka Utaha muttered softly to herself, smiling even more brightly.
…
Next up was Gokou Ruri.
She originally thought it would be like Yamada Elf, or even worse, but to her surprise, both Sensei and Nayuta had read it.
She had thought that after guiding her with the first volume of her debut work, Sensei hadn't paid any more attention, but it seemed that wasn't the case.
Even Nayuta, who had helped her, had been quietly following her.
This made her very happy.
Naturally, Izumi Masamune and Kani Nayuta's suggestions benefited her greatly.
The third was Kasumigaoka Utaha.
Although her sales had not yet caught up to Yamada Elf's three years of accumulated debut work, she was indeed a rising star in the industry. Her debut work, "love metronome," was very familiar to everyone present, which made Yamada Elf very envious.
Senju Muramasa was recommended by others due to club activities, Kani Nayuta was due to her 'Izumi Masamune's disciple' facade, Gokou Ruri was due to 'sisterly competition,' and Yamada Elf learned about her from Sagiri.
What made Miss Elf even more jealous was that Kasumigaoka Utaha's "love metronome" received high praise.
Although there were some suggestions, they were all rather broad points, symbolic in nature. This indicated that Kasumigaoka Utaha was already a mature creator, lacking only accumulation and inspiration.
"Hmm… I understand."
Kasumigaoka Utaha still humbly listened to everyone's opinions.
Because deep down, she knew that such treatment was largely due to that meeting on that day…
She avoided detours, stimulated her potential early, and made Kasumigaoka Utaha's achievements far exceed the original work's level at the same period.
The bottom three had finished; now it was time for the top three to be reviewed.
Compared to the rawness of these three, the other three were the current leaders of the industry, already top-tier creators, who had single-handedly elevated 'Fujikawa' from one of the three major publishing houses to a level far surpassing the other two.
What concerned them most was…
What kind of suggestions would Kani Nayuta and Senju Muramasa have for Izumi Masamune?
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